これは、TESOLを勉強していたときの Grammar & Editing クラスでの課題です。先生が直してくださったところもお見せしますので、みなさんの参考になると思います。
My Definition of Success
For me, to be successful is to be happy. Being happy means you are satisfied with what you have and what you do.
Having money itself does not guarantee
s that you can be always be happy because there are things that money cannot buy. However, having some money does not hurt because it may help you buy things that make you happy. It also may help you have an environment that makes you happy. In my opinion, nevertheless, money should not be used to measure happiness. It should be used as a tool to make people happy.
Teacher’s comment: beautifully written